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BLACK JACK - OPENING SCENES


INT. APARTMENT - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT

It's dark. Light from an outside malfuctioning gangling street lamp reaches through the living room window casting an unstable shard of light across the apartment ceiling. Underneath this dance of shadow and light, a YOUNG MAN lies restless and half naked on a drab sofa. He stretches his hand wearily across his shrouded face and lifts himself as though the weight of the world were burying into his shoulders.

He stands up, abruptly turning to face the window. He stays there for a few moments, just gazing out, before turning back around and walking out of the room, his features obscured by darkness.

Through the window, and up in the night sky, the stars begin to move to form together. They merge to create two words surrounded by nothing but darkness:

TITLE: BLACK JACK


INT. CORRIDOR - NIGHT

The young man exits his apartment and instantly shrinks under the harsh bright light of the corridor, his posture and dark hair rendering him indistinct.
He steps to the apartment door immediately opposite and KNOCKS to no answer. He KNOCKS again, harder... still no answer. He fidgets through his jean pocket and pulls out a key, using it to unlock the door.

INT. APARTMENT - BEDROOM - NIGHT

Complete darkness is broken by a table lamp being switched on. An old lady is in bed, half asleep, reeling her arm in from the lamp, eyes flinching at the light. A wheelchair sits besdide the bed.
There's a knock at the bedroom door.

YOUNG MAN
It's Jack.

OLD LADY
(shouting)
Come on in.

JACK walks into the room, and the old lady struggles to lift herself into a sitting position.

OLD LADY
(hurried)
I'm sorry, Jack, I-I've only just woke.

JACK
(calmly)
It's no problem, Doris.

Jack walks over to DORIS'S side of the bed, maoeuvering himself around the wheelchair. Darkness seems to follow him; still his face is obscured by shadow.

He pauses, giving Doris a moment to gather herself.

JACK
(considerate)
You ready?

She nods and Jack lifts her from the bed. As he moves her, she yawns, and though she politely attempts to cover her mouth, her fragile bones can't
quite move quickly enough to do so.

JACK
(playfully)
Good morning.

Jack carefully places her into the wheelchair.

DORIS
(smiling)
Thank you.

He walks to a table that holds a kettle, a couple of cups and coffee condiment kits: the kind of thing you'd see in a hotel. He begins preparing coffee. DORIS watches him affectionately.

DORIS
Jack, what are you doing?

Jack half turns, smiling, half of his face exposed to the light. High cheek bones, big brown eyes, and a mischievous smile render him quite cute.

JACK
Making coffee.

DORIS
You don't have to always do this you know. I am capable.

Jack resumes preparing coffee, his back to Doris.

JACK
(serious)
I know. I like to.

The kettle reaches boiling point, and Jack pours the hot water. He stirs, and then hands the cup to Doris cautiously and caringly.

JACK
So, is there anything I can get for you today?

DORIS
No... I-I think I've everything I need.

Doris blows at the steaming coffee.

JACK
You sure?

DORIS
I'm sure.

She takes a sip.                          

JACK
Right, well, I'd best get going.

DORIS
(smiling)
Okay
.
JACK
I'll... see you later then.

DORIS
Bye, Jack, and thank you...

Jack steps towards the door.

DORIS
(solemnly)
I do hope your day is a good one.

Jack reaches the door and turns to look back at Doris. Light finally catches his face in full, exposing unsightly indented scars on one side of his face. It's as though someone has repeatedly punctured his face with glass.

Jack smiles sadly.

JACK
You too.
Black Jack - Opening Scenes
An introduction to Black Jack in screenplay form. A boxing drama that I'm hoping to develop as a film and in comic book form. Hope you enjoy. Let me know what you think please.
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  • Mood: Love
  • Listening to: Far Cry 3 Soundtrack / AC 3 Soundtrack
  • Reading: The Psychopath Test / Quiet
  • Watching: Heroes Season One
  • Playing: AC 3 / Devil May Cry / Hitman Absolution
  • Eating: Nothing
  • Drinking: Water
I see! I SEE! And I AM. And for the first time I am perfectly fine; I am free.

You can be too. An amazing man gives you just the answer you need: thelovetrain.deviantart.com/ar…

Let's fly.

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Cr0atoan Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hey are you still active on dA? I have an idea I'd like to pass by you if you aren't busy.
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NJValente Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Professional
Thanks a lot for the watch!!
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JonathanWyke Featured By Owner May 18, 2013   General Artist
Thanks for the faves!
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TheLoveTrain Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013
Happy Birthday to you, :sing:
Happy Birthday to you, :sing:
Happy Birthday dear Kevin, :sing:
Happy Birthday to you.
:sing:

I hope it's your best ever, buddy. Have fun … I'll be thinking of you.
:chew::cake::excited::party::juggle:

~Brian :heart:
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mechangel2002 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Happy birthday!
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